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project 2.docx ORIGINALITY REPORT

PRIMARY SOURCES

Efstathios Papanikolaou, Jannis Angelis, Vassilis Moustakis. “Which type of ecosystem for distributed ledger technology?”, Technology in Society, 2022 Publication

wrap.warwick.ac.uk Internet Source

Submitted to Central Queensland University Student Paper

link.springer.com Internet Source

www.coursehero.com Internet Source

Submitted to Southern New Hampshire University – Continuing Education Student Paper

www.accc.gov.au Internet Source

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Exclude matches < 4 words

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Project 2.docx GRADEMARK REPORT

GENERAL COMMENTS

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Thorough explanation This part helps your readers understand your ideas. Be this clear when explaining your ideas throughout your essay.

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Wordy Wordy: If you use too many words to describe a relatively minor point, your paper may seem wordy. In order to be as concise as possible, trim your sentences down and use longer, more meaningful words. Try to use fewer two- and three-letter words, passive constructions, and weak verbs such as “seem” and “appear.”

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Your final sentence should be a transition that leads into the discussion of your first trend in the body of your paper.

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Write in the third person.

Consider point of view Who is the narrator? Maintain your story’s narrator from beginning to end. If the story is told from third person point of view, it should stay in that perspective, signaling dialogue with phrases like “she uttered” or “he yelled”.

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Clone This writing appears to be a “clone” of someone else’s work. “Clone” plagiarism happens when another author’s work is copied, word-for-word. Rewrite this section of writing, being sure to incorporate your own ideas and properly cited quotes and ideas from your sources.

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Unclear antecedent, what does ‘this” refer to?

Thorough explanation This part helps your readers understand your ideas. Be this clear when explaining your ideas throughout your essay.

Powerful evidence You’re doing a better job of developing your ideas here. Look for other opportunities to include relevant and powerful examples from each source to support your position.

Effective transition Your transitions are helping to make your ideas in this part clear. Continue to create connections and unity throughout your whole essay by using specific transitions to link your ideas together.

Helpful transition Good job using a transition word in this section. Continue to include other transitions, like “finally” or “next,” throughout the body of your story to show your readers how events are connected.

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Consider point of view Who is the narrator? Maintain your story’s narrator from beginning to end. If the story is told from third person point of view, it should stay in that perspective, signaling dialogue with phrases like “she uttered” or “he yelled”.

Beat the buzzer Beat the buzzer by writing a more purposeful and reflective last sentence that finalizes the points in this section and helps transition to the next paragraph.

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Strong explanation Your explanation in this section is clear. Which parts of your essay would benefit from this type of thorough attention?

Effective transition Your transitions are helping to make your ideas in this part clear. Continue to create connections and unity throughout your whole essay by using specific transitions to link your ideas together.

Clone This writing appears to be a “clone” of someone else’s work. “Clone” plagiarism happens when another author’s work is copied, word-for-word. Rewrite this section of writing, being sure to incorporate your own ideas and properly cited quotes and ideas from your sources.

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Consider point of view Who is the narrator? Maintain your story’s narrator from beginning to end. If the story is told from third person point of view, it should stay in that perspective, signaling dialogue with phrases like “she uttered” or “he yelled”.

Strong evidence The evidence that you include in this section is strong. Continue to choose relevant, accurate data and evidence to help support your claim and counterclaim.

Wordy Wordy: If you use too many words to describe a relatively minor point, your paper may seem wordy. In order to be as concise as possible, trim your sentences down and use longer, more meaningful words. Try to use fewer two- and three-letter words, passive constructions, and weak verbs such as “seem” and “appear.”

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Describe characters The characters in your narrative should appear detailed and realistic. Describe your characters in significant and meaningful ways to bring them to life for your readers.

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Strong example This example is helpful to your essay. Look for other parts of your essay that could improve with a strong example.

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this is a great example, consider splitting it into two sentences.

Reword sentence This sentence might be difficult for your readers to understand. Reword this sentence so your meaning is clear to your audience.

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Beat the buzzer Beat the buzzer by writing a more purposeful and reflective last sentence that finalizes the points in this section and helps transition to the next paragraph.

Wordy Wordy: If you use too many words to describe a relatively minor point, your paper may seem wordy. In order to be as concise as possible, trim your sentences down and use longer, more meaningful words. Try to use fewer two- and three-letter words, passive constructions, and weak verbs such as “seem” and “appear.”

Strong evidence The evidence that you include in this section is strong. Continue to choose relevant, appropriate data and evidence to help support your claim and counterclaim.

Missing “,” Missing comma: Though it may not always be grammatically necessary, a comma can often help to prevent a misreading. When a sentence opens with an introductory element (a phrase, clause or word that is logically related to another phrase or clause in the same sentence), it is a great help to your reader to place a comma after that introductory element. Such phrases will often begin with words like “because,” “while” or “although,” as in the following example: “While everyone was fighting, the bear wandered away.” As you can see, without the comma, the sentence would be confusing.

Include evidence There is no direct evidence to support your ideas. Include evidence that appropriately develops your perspective on the historical topic.

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Missing comma: Though it may not always be grammatically necessary, a comma can often help to prevent a misreading. When a sentence opens with an introductory element (a phrase, clause or word that is logically related to another phrase or clause in the same sentence), it is a great help to your reader to place a comma after that introductory element. Such phrases will often begin with words like “because,” “while” or “although,” as in the following example: “While everyone was fighting, the bear wandered away.” As you can see, without the comma, the sentence would be confusing.

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The growing needed for online shopping is the…

Helpful transition Nice work incorporating this transitional phrase. You may also want to consider advanced phrases (like “hence” or “subsequently”) that will elevate your language and connections when writing.

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Prep. Incorrect preposition: Some words must be used together with certain prepositions in order to create the meaning you intend. For example, to yell “to” someone is different from yelling “at” someone. Some confusion results from words such as “compare,” which usually takes the preposition “to” when it refers to describing the resemblances between things that are not similar, and takes the preposition “with” when it describes the resemblances between things that are similar.

Text Comment. What is the Theme for this section?

Include evidence Find an example from the source(s) that best supports this point and include it in this part of your essay. Each point in your essay needs to be supported with a concrete example.

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Strong section This section is strong in its development of your thesis. Look for other areas of your essay that could use more evidence or explanation in order to thoroughly support your thesis.